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Looking for Mr. Write

One night last week, I entered the “First Paragraph” blog contest that Nathan Bransford was hosting. After copying and pasting the first lines of Jim and Jack into the official comment thread, I got the message that it had been added but might take a while to show. Then I went to bed.

The contest concluded the next day, and that afternoon I checked to make sure my comment had actually gone through. As I maneuvered through the blizzard of entries to comments posted around the time mine was, I happened to read many of the competition’s paragraphs. Some were bad, some were decent, some were fashionably stark, others were the purplest of prose. Then I found mine. After reading everything else, I didn’t even think it sounded that great.

It’s one thing to know that there are millions of writer-wannabes out there, all searching for the same brass ring, but it’s quite another to wade through the slush pile and see that for oneself. Everyone thinks his or her manuscript is the next bestseller, and almost all are certain to be wrong.

I once read a study which purported that (generally) everyone thinks they are good-looking. No matter how homely a person might be, when they see themselves alone in a mirror, they can fully appreciate their own uniqueness. It’s only amongst the masses that one falls short, and the tall, dark and handsome are the ones who always seem to get the girl. However, there are many who might prefer the nice guy with the good sense of humor, if they only got to know him.

I suspect that it’s similar when submitting one’s manuscript, which is why “knowing someone” in this business can make such a difference. Like a well-meaning friend setting up a blind date, a referral affords the opportunity for agents and editors to give a manuscript some individual attention, hopefully allowing them to recognize Mr. Right. That’s why contests like NB’s are so popular – the prize of getting one’s work in front of an agent is like winning The Dating Game. Things might not work out, but at least you have a chance to strut your stuff.

Alas, I didn’t win, but here’s my first paragraph (and just a tad more), of my Half Moon Island History-Mystery, written for gifted boys aged 11-16* who enjoy books like My Side of the Mountain and A Separate Peace:

—–Jack awakened early, the island still in slumber except for the songbirds, whose warbling kept him from rolling over and going back to sleep. Drowsy, he listened for their different voices, identifying a cardinal and then a robin. A mourning dove cooed its gentle trill, and he could hear the distant tapping of a woodpecker. A jay screeched overhead, breaking the peacefulness of the moment. Jack rolled over in the half-light to peer at his identical twin, asleep in the other bed. He was lying on his back with his mouth open, a light snore issuing with each breath.

—–“Jim!” Jack whispered. His brother remained motionless, pajama-clad legs entangled in the white cotton bedspread. With a grin, Jack reached over to the desk and tore a corner off some scrap paper.

* Refer to Previous Post: Considering Asynchronous Development in Book Selection

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Making Lemonade

I spent the first half of today feeling discouraged, and the second half of today feeling like my writing is so terrible that I shouldn’t waste my time trying to get published. In other words, I had my normal response to a partial-manuscript rejection.

By this evening, I had straightened around to deciding that I should at least consider an idea proposed by the agent that would, in her opinion, increase my likelihood of securing representation:
Drumroll, please…

Switch it from YA to MG.

This agent is not the first to suggest that Jim and Jack has a Middle Grade feel to it. Two of my critique partners also mentioned this, but I have stayed true to my original vision of the novel being for gifted eighth-grade boys (as well as a grade or two in both directions).

Why?

1. Boys mature at a significantly slower rate than girls during those tween/lower teen years.

2. Boys are generally not as emotionally complex as girls (read The Male Brain, by Louann Brizendine, MD, if you disagree with this. If you are still doubt, go make friends with a 12-15 year old boy.)

The Male Brain

3. Gifted kids of both sexes are known for their asynchronous development, in that their emotional maturity frequently lags behind their intellectual prowess.

4. 1929 (in which half of Jim and Jack is set) was a simpler time in many ways. Even though adolescents typically had more responsibilities at a younger age, frequently getting married right out of high school, there was a naiveté that doesn’t exist today. Society as a whole was more focused on developing character rather than on “being cool,” and I want that lack of sophistication to be reflected in my 1929 characters.

5. Just to make sure I was right, I had my manuscript test driven by ten 12-to 16-year-old gifted boys (nine of whom did not know me) before I started querying. On response sheets, in answer to the question, “Do you think you were the right age to read this novel? Why, or why not? What age would you think IS the right age?” every one of them thought that theirs was exactly the right age, for various reasons. Which says to me that it is right on target.

I am willing to consider the change, though. Clinging to my rationale won’t bring Jim and Jack any closer to publication. As the litmus test, I have recruited my reluctant-reader middle grade son to read it. If he likes it, I will pitch it differently and see what happens.

They say that you know you’re getting closer when you start to get personalized rejections. We’ll see.

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