Monthly Archives: August 2010

TMI

I had to stop while driving the other day to ask a stranger for directions, and quickly regretted it. The man was willing to help, but after telling me how to get where I was going, he added, “otherwise, you could take a left at the Walmart, go down over the bridge and and then take a right after about two miles. Then you take a quick left over the tracks and it’s just past the frontage road. There are fewer traffic lights that way. The bridge is normally out, but lately there hasn’t been any rain, and it’s open.” (Okay, this is not exactly what he said, but you get the gist of it.)

I thanked him with glazed eyes, trying to keep his original instructions straight in my brain. Amazingly, I got where I was going, no thanks to his confusing directions.

This experience put me in mind of a large number of writing samples that I’ve seen posted online. The story is there, and sometimes it’s not bad, but it is buried in details and extraneous words that require the reader to work to figure out what the author is trying to say.

I made that mistake, when writing the first draft of Jim and Jack. I wanted the reader to see things the same way I did, in order to provide a better understanding of the characters and the story. When I read it over the first time through, I had a lot of trimming to do.

The best way to recognize this “overwriting” is to read the work of authors who are not yet published. When encountered, the issue is so obvious that it is much easier to identify in one’s own work.

Each person has his/her own style, but clarity is something that all writers should strive for. Nothing is worse than having to re-read a passage because it is too convoluted to “get” the first time through. If an agent has to do much of that, the manuscript is going to get rejected.

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Parental Guidance Suggested

My father, as I mentioned a few posts ago, recently purchased a Kindle. I encouraged him to buy it, because his vision has been temporarily impaired by a series of unavoidable eye surgeries. In order to read anything, he has had to don an elaborate headgear with magnifying glasses attached to the front.

One can change the type size on a Kindle, and if necessary, it even has a text to speech feature, so it seemed like the perfect solution. After we figured out how to use it, the large type worked out well, but unfortunately, the “main” and “menu” pages remain in fine print. To get around this, whenever he wants to download a new title, he calls me and I go to my computer, log on to his Amazon account, and order it for him.

I am happy to do this, appreciative of the fact that my father is finally able to sit down and read without resembling an escapee from a science fiction movie, but the download requests have gotten a little awkward.

Dad is a retired minister, and his first purchase was naturally a Bible. No problem. Then he wanted Ken Bailey’s, Jesus Through Middle Eastern Eyes. Another fine choice. His third request was, The Number One Ladies Detective Agency, by Alexander McCall Smith.

This novel was quite popular when it first came out, and my book group happened to read it. The protagonist is an African woman, and much of the story is good, but in my opinion, the voice is distractingly male. The main character’s thoughts and emotions regarding her marriage aren’t authentic, particularly the fact that her sexually abusive husband used to beat her, and she secretly enjoyed it.

Needless to say, the idea of my elderly parent reading this was a tad uncomfortable for me. I ordered it for him, but did not mention that I’d read it, lest he feel equally awkward when he came upon those descriptive scenes.

His next choice was Stieg Larsson’s The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo. Eyebrows raised, I ordered it without comment.

Then he asked me to order Forever, by Judy Blume.

Whaaat? Racy in its time, compared to today’s fare it is rather tame. But still. I couldn’t keep quiet any longer.

“Uh, Dad – do you know what that one is about?”

“Well, not really, but I caught the end of a show on NPR the other day that recommended it.”

“It’s a love story for teenage girls.” I looked it up on Amazon and read him the description.

“Oh.”

“Did you still want me to order it?”

I cringed.

“Oh, I guess not. How about The Shack by William P. Young? I’ve heard that’s good.”

Relief washed over me.

Everything Dad’s ordered has been completely within the bounds of propriety, but even as an adult, the idea of my parents reading anything higher than a G-rating makes me wince.

Am I the only one?

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Having a Busy Week

I have been busy getting my boys ready for their first day of school this week, but will post Wednesday. See you then! 🙂

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Oldies but Goodies: Great Books for Kindergarteners

Today’s “Oldies but Goodies” is a selection of timeless books for kindergarteners and early readers. Some of these titles can still be found at the local library, most are available through Amazon.com and the rest are obtainable at reasonably priced used-book websites like AbeBooks.com and alibras.com. All of them have great illustrations. 🙂

Mike Mulligan and His Steam Shovel

by Virginia Lee Burton

Mike Mulligan and His Steam Shovel

The Friendly Book

by Margaret Wise Brown

The Friendly Book (Big Little Golden Book)

Wait Till the Moon is Full

by Margaret Wise Brown

Wait Till the Moon Is Full

The Cat in the Hat

by Dr. Seuss

The Cat in the Hat

Lilly’s Purple Plastic Purse

by Kevin Henkes

Lilly's Purple Plastic Purse

The Velveteen Rabbit

by Margey Williams Bianco

The Velveteen Rabbit

Anatole

by Eve Titus

Anatole

I Can’t, Said the Ant

by Polly Cameron

"I Can't" Said the Ant

Anything by Beatrix Potter

Beatrix Potter The Complete Tales

The Story of Ferdinand

by Munro Leaf

The Story of Ferdinand (Puffin Storytime)

Millions of Cats

by Wanda Gag

Millions of Cats (Gift Edition) (Picture Puffin Books)

The Dragon Who Liked to Spit Fire

by Judy Varga

The Dragon Who Liked To Spit Fire

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Making Lemonade

I spent the first half of today feeling discouraged, and the second half of today feeling like my writing is so terrible that I shouldn’t waste my time trying to get published. In other words, I had my normal response to a partial-manuscript rejection.

By this evening, I had straightened around to deciding that I should at least consider an idea proposed by the agent that would, in her opinion, increase my likelihood of securing representation:
Drumroll, please…

Switch it from YA to MG.

This agent is not the first to suggest that Jim and Jack has a Middle Grade feel to it. Two of my critique partners also mentioned this, but I have stayed true to my original vision of the novel being for gifted eighth-grade boys (as well as a grade or two in both directions).

Why?

1. Boys mature at a significantly slower rate than girls during those tween/lower teen years.

2. Boys are generally not as emotionally complex as girls (read The Male Brain, by Louann Brizendine, MD, if you disagree with this. If you are still doubt, go make friends with a 12-15 year old boy.)

The Male Brain

3. Gifted kids of both sexes are known for their asynchronous development, in that their emotional maturity frequently lags behind their intellectual prowess.

4. 1929 (in which half of Jim and Jack is set) was a simpler time in many ways. Even though adolescents typically had more responsibilities at a younger age, frequently getting married right out of high school, there was a naiveté that doesn’t exist today. Society as a whole was more focused on developing character rather than on “being cool,” and I want that lack of sophistication to be reflected in my 1929 characters.

5. Just to make sure I was right, I had my manuscript test driven by ten 12-to 16-year-old gifted boys (nine of whom did not know me) before I started querying. On response sheets, in answer to the question, “Do you think you were the right age to read this novel? Why, or why not? What age would you think IS the right age?” every one of them thought that theirs was exactly the right age, for various reasons. Which says to me that it is right on target.

I am willing to consider the change, though. Clinging to my rationale won’t bring Jim and Jack any closer to publication. As the litmus test, I have recruited my reluctant-reader middle grade son to read it. If he likes it, I will pitch it differently and see what happens.

They say that you know you’re getting closer when you start to get personalized rejections. We’ll see.

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WriteOnCon – The Gift that Keeps on Giving

Well, I have to hand it to Jamie Harrington, Elana Johnson, Casey McCormick, Shannon Messenger, Lisa and Laura Roecker, and Jennifer Stayrook. Their brainchild, the WriteOnCon online conference for PB, MG and YA writers, was fantastic.

Styled after a traditional writer’s conference (except that it was free!), registration opened up on July 1, and the conference began this Tuesday morning at 6am, EDT. For three whole days (and evenings), the schedule was packed with posts by industry professionals, vlogs, critique forums, interactive agent panels, live video workshops, and prize drawings. Attendees were able to “get together” with each other and agents in the conference chat, lounge and through personal messaging. It was a lot of fun, and very informative.

A glitch with the server on the first day precluded many registrants (myself included) from logging on to the site, but every effort was made by the organizers for people to still “attend,” by posting all of the happenings and contests on their blogs. By Wednesday morning, everything was fixed, with plenty of time left for people to post items for critique.

The site and all of its posts will remain up so that anyone who was unable to participate can continue to benefit from the shared wisdom. If you missed it, go on over and check it out. It’s the next best thing to being there.

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So Little Time, So Many Writing Tasks

Is anyone else feeling bogged down with reading/writing activities right now?

Me:
(not necessarily in this order)

1. Finish reading the library book that I have been squeezing in between other time commitments, because it is due on Sunday and I’ve already renewed it the maximum number of times.

2. Complete the critique of a manuscript for two critique partners who have co-authored a novel (I’m only on page 35).

3. Rewrite my query letter (again!), this time baldly including the fact that my manuscript is really two stories that alternate throughout the novel.

4.“Attend” WriteOnCon for the next three days.

5. Finish reading Cry the Beloved Country. (My book group discussed it last evening, but I had only managed to get to page 104.)

6. Start reading next month’s book group novel (Guernsey Literary and Potato Peel Pie Society).

7. Get back to either of the two manuscripts I’m in the middle of working on, which haven’t seen the light of day in months.

8. Read/comment on writer friends’ blogs.

9. Lurk on AQConnect.

10. Write my blog posts for the week.

I have been randomly chipping away at these tasks, but today decided to make a schedule and stick to it, at least until I can get the critiquing and reading under control.

What do YOU do when overload strikes?

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Vintage Book Review: Freckles by Gene Stratton-Porter

My father recently purchased a Kindle, but needs someone with younger eyes to figure out how to use it and then show him what to do. Fortunately, I am that someone, and have been enjoying it all week.

Paradoxically, on this newfangled contraption, I have been reading a vintage novel — Freckles, by Gene Stratton-Porter.

Freckles (Library of Indiana Classics)

First published in 1904, it is the tale of a young man whose only knowledge of his origins is that he was found as a baby on the doorstep of a Chicago orphanage, badly beaten and missing a hand.

His boldness in the face of adversity impresses a lumber boss, who gives him the job of guarding a valuable stand of timber in the swamplands of Indiana. Although it almost kills him, Freckles overcomes the dangerous conditions and starts to appreciate the beauty and majesty of the natural world.

Surprised one day by a pretty young woman who comes upon his “study,” (a hideaway he has created by transplanting flowers and foliage around a grouping of trees), he dubs her his “swamp angel” and helps the wildlife photographer she works for to access many unusual birds and moths.

Eventually, thieves come to steal some trees, there is fist fighting and shooting, and Freckles is kidnapped by murderers. Will he escape? Will he ever find his family? Will he and the Swamp Angel ever be more than friends? As you might guess, the answers are yes, yes and yes, but the story is engaging apart from the main plot points, and well worth the read.

My only criticism is that while the majority of the dialogue is believable, from a modern standpoint some of it tends toward the melodramatic. Stratton-Porter was an extremely popular author in her day, so one can presume that the writing style is reflective of the era. Fortunately, the strength of the storyline helps to ease the reader through the more fervent passages.

From a historical perspective, the book’s portrayal of women as strong-minded and courageous, and men as thoughtful and sensitive inspires the notion that mid-twentieth century stereotypes of “real men” being stoically macho and women being silly and weak may have been thrust upon us more by our fathers’ generation than our forefathers’. One wonders if women’s twentieth century shift from homemaker, caregiver and encourager to roles more traditionally held by men resulted in a backlash of polarization as males were stripped of their historical importance as protectors, breadwinners and authority figures.

I would guess that this title is no longer available at the average local library, but it is in stock at Amazon.com, and is even cheaper for the Kindle. Freckles can also be read for free online at Gutenberg.org. Check it out — it’s good, not only as a story, but as a historical reflection of the times.

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Keyboard Tips for the Mac

Heidi Thomas of The Blood-Red Pencil posted today about the correct way to type punctuation that is not listed on PC keyboards (specifically, the backwards apostrophe and the em-dash).

My previous career as a computer graphics artist and typesetter qualifies me to do the same for Mac users, plus a few more handy little keyboard tricks that I have found useful when typing my manuscripts. (The = sign and commas are just for clarity – don’t type them):

é = option e, e

ü = option u, u

ñ = option n, n

ç = option c

(em dash) = option shift hyphen

° (degree sign) = option shift 8

© = option G

= option [

= option shift [

= option ]

= option shift ]

¢ = option 4

= option ;

= option 2

Happy typing! 🙂

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